Better English and ESL writing workshops — all workshopped essays listed here
— These essays are from students from both SBHS and my coachees, and are from Year 10 to Year 12. In each case the student has submitted a draft. I have then set about annotating and correcting the draft. If you read these annotated drafts very carefully you may find things that you can apply to your own work. Finally, you can read the corrected essay with the annotations removed.
The point is that each essay has definitely improved, particularly on those marking criteria that deal with “expression.” Study them carefully.
Essay 1: Year 12 Creative Writing.
Essay 2: Year 11/12 Creative Writing.
Essay 3: Year 10 History/Current Affairs. On Geocities.
Essay 4: Year 12 English — In the Wild Module 2003. All on one page with new format. On Geocities.
Essay 5: Year 12 English — Area Study: Imaginative Journeys, 2006. A feature article.
A Year 11-12 Unit on Images of Men includes workshopped model essays in four different text types.
Creative writing Year 10 age level, six months in Australia.
HSC Advanced English Module B “Critical study of a text”. On Cloudstreet by Tim Winton.
HSC Advanced English Module A “Brave New World” and “Blade Runner”.
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ESL Writing
July 19, 2007 at 12:16 pm
Something that has really helped me improve my writing is not only to read a lot of essays, but to read them out loud to myself. Hearing the English helps the words to make more sense. My online tutor, Amanda, taught me this and it’s been really helpful. You can find her site here.
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ninglun
July 19, 2007 at 12:28 pm
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Helen
November 29, 2007 at 11:25 am
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